Sunday 9 November 2008

I am away...



Bitterness

It's hard to run out of bitterness
and she is trying to wear it thin
like marmite on toast.
One day she will open her mouth
and there will be nothing
but good, even through milk-breath
or the whiff of morning through the yawns.
But for now, it is enough to say
that insulting is not
the half of it.

1 comment:

mand said...

Brilliant concept. Makes me hope she runs out soon.

I would suggest 'but' instead of 'and' in line 2; and perhaps ditch the last three lines? (Suggested in the spirit of friendship and writerly mutual support, not just being negative.)

So glad i have found this blog!